I clung, I dug in my nails, but that just drove him away. I tried to be normal, to act cool, but it was too late. I couldn’t act in the face of losing what my whole life revolved around. It was too hard. Desperation conquered me.
It was all that whore Debra’s fault. She was the wedge. She should have just stayed away. I warned her plenty. She didn’t listen, so she paid for it.
Then Tommy, the betrayer, gets in my face and hits me. Why couldn’t he see that I needed him more than Debra ever could? That what we had was important. It all got too much. I hit him back. We bled. He could have killed me, he stood over me with a baseball bat. He should have. It would have been an act of mercy. I couldn’t live alone.
I had a... a bro–...
He was important, you know? Everything... Lost. Fuck!
I’d lived with no guilt. Just his bloody clock to remind me–
Now I can’t even look at it. He’d be so ashamed. I didn’t...
I just didn’t.
And I’m not going to. Ever.
Cos this is it.
5 comments:
By popular demand... here are Brian's final thoughts based on the events of the story that didn't come into creation.
As it didn't really explain what Game Day was, I shall tell you! The anniversary of Brian's older brother's death (for which he was responsible, or at least believed himself to be responsible for). His older brother would have been 18, and Brian 14 when it happened. So a few years have transpired. And it also means that his older brother used a Flintstone's clock up until his death (if we're being technical). Either that or he gave it to Brian as a present not long before his death.
I know I said "Part One", but I hadn't entirely worked out the side-plot between Tommy and Debra (it was going to be a big side plot too, not just some insignificant relationship. Maybe I shouldn't call it a side-plot...), so am not sure if I can elaborate from their points of view.
Well there you have it, masses. I hope that pleases the very many of you that there are. :)
Dale.
P.S. If I did it all over again I'd get rid of the voyeur side of things completely. Having an anonymous watcher was just a silly little complication that served no point!
Yay for closure! And Voyeur may not have worked out exactly like you planned, but at least it inspired parts of I'M JUST LIVING.
Ps. You were a little unclear on how Brian got rid of Debra... it was a giant domino, yeah? :)
Dale...I am incredibly disappointed that you didn't finish this ! :P Actually… I trust your judgment, but still, I like your writing so I dislike being robbed of the opportunity to be exposed to more of it! :P
Keep writing :P
Ok ok! Well! Now things are explained; hey, you can always try this again in the future! Though now the ending is kinda revealed....
Anyway, I wish I'd had the chance to figure out the above through the progression of the story, but it's an interesting idea and the writing style was there. Now I think I'll have to find time to read that intriguing script that landed in my inbox not long ago. :)
Jimzip :D
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